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The Write Way: What Not to Do So That Your Writing Rings True

Charles Ray's Ramblings

You’re penning that mystery novel, and you think you have the perfect scene; a body lies in a pool of blood on the sidewalk, your PI protagonist, a police detective, and the medical examiner stand over it. The following dialogue ensues:

Cop:  “What do we have here, doc?”

ME:  “A white male in his late thirties with GSW to the chest.”

PI: “When did he die?”

ME: “From lividity and liver temp, I’d place time of death between 2 and 2:30 this morning.”

Okay, let’s stop there. There would be beats, or actions included here, not just lines of dialogue, but that’s not the point I wanted to make. Readers raised on a diet of TV cop shows will probably not see anything wrong with this little scene, but they would be wrong. There are so many things here that are incorrect it’s hard to know where to start. If…

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